I posted this short story out on TriggerStreet.com. If you’re a writer, you may want to check it out. It provides peer feedback and more for short stories, books, screenplays, and even indie films. Here’s the link: http://www.triggerstreet.com/gyrobase/index
And here’s the beginning of the first short story I posted there. I’m quite pleased because I’ve been getting some good reviews.
Jon’s father Yosi was still trying to finish the boat before the Sea swallowed them up. His father paused from his work trying to get a rough hewn plank on the starboard ribs of the frame to line up with the one beneath it. He straightened his back and looked at the crashing waves that had already devoured the beaches and were moving ever closer to the ancient ground, where they stood, that had not touched salt water for generations.
Yosi called to Jon, and he left his mother’s side. His father told the young boy to hold a bucket of pitch so that he could more quickly seal the outer shell. Obediently he raised the pail, which soon became heavy in the blistering sun of midday. Never had his father created a boat in such a way. He had taught Jon to always complete it, and then apply the sticky resin. But normally it would take a week to make a good boat, and he would have help from others. They were alone now, and time was up.
The rest of the story is here: http://posting.triggerstreet.com/local/3583833/236806-The_Perishing_Land.pdf
Let me know what you think!